Interesting story... and awesome picture. I couldn't help but smile. :)
Good story. I'd mention the huge crowd first, but still well written overall. Great pic as well; that dude has a rad moustache!
Interesting topic, but work on pauses when speaking.
This story is fun! It was very informational. Possibly work on pausing at the end of sentences! Good job!
Interesting story... and awesome picture. I couldn't help but smile. :)
ReplyDeleteGood story. I'd mention the huge crowd first, but still well written overall. Great pic as well; that dude has a rad moustache!
ReplyDeleteInteresting topic, but work on pauses when speaking.
ReplyDeleteThis story is fun! It was very informational. Possibly work on pausing at the end of sentences! Good job!
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